Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: guest48 on May 08, 2026, 06:05:47 pm
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Friends, I retired from automobile sales after 32 years. I managed a new car dealership and worked 6 days a week which included working many long hours. I was raising a family of 5 children, but on those days I did get off, I was selfish with my time and did the things I wanted to do instead of giving my children the real quality time they deserved. Time is much more valuable than just providing for a child. Now I know, and I live with those regrets.
Your thoughts on this song?
Song Title:
HEAVY CHAINS OF REGRET
Lyrics:
Wish I could go back...
You should get a trophy for raising 5 kids , Sounds good , little light on the furniture or what you might call details
But looks good man
Chasin’ my own road, too fast to turn around,
Left my kids to grow up in that sleepy little town.
Doing my own thing I was barely there to see,
My children's lives, unfoldin’ right in front of me.
Heavy chains of regret, I'll carry all my days,
Too selfish to care, wouldn't change my ways.
Now, I’d give up my world, to be there for their cries,
Hold their hands, wipe the tears, from their eyes.
Wanting my own good times, they felt the pain,
Time carved its scars, I’m the one to blame.
Chose my own darkness, over their morning light,
Now, I wake up crying, in the still of the night.
I only cared about myself, let their days drift by,
Missed them growing up, wish I would have tried.
I’d swap all my tomorrows, to rewind those yesterdays,
This regret’s a blade that cuts me deeper every day.
Heavy chains of regret, I'll carry all my days,
Too selfish to care, wouldn't change my ways.
Now, I’d give up my world, to be there for their cries,
Hold their hands, wipe those tears, from their eyes.
Wish time could turn back, I'd guard their hearts,
Regret’s a lonesome road, it's where losing starts.
I'd give most anything, if the hurt could be undone,
But, now it’s just me, and this shadow... I can’t outrun.
https://youtu.be/9ysnRvSHb2Q?si=CDmrGA8f1YTSvigC
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The theme is powerful and relatable, but it comes off more as cathartic than anything else. It doesn’t necessarily need a strict sequence or progression, but the idea stays in the same emotional space from start to finish rather than expanding or developing.
A bit more detail or specific imagery might make it even more powerful. The relationship with the children feels central, but also a bit unclear in terms of where things actually stand now as the singer reflects back on past mistakes — though it still works as written, so it’s really up to you.
Thank you for the critique, Pistol! I truly do appreciate your thoughts and input! Yes, I guess my emotional side of thinking about my regrets poured out with each verse. It was kind of personal for me and I was not really focused on addressing a general listener. Thank you for your response.
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The theme is powerful and relatable, but it comes off more as cathartic than anything else. It doesn’t necessarily need a strict sequence or progression, but the idea stays in the same emotional space from start to finish rather than expanding or developing.
A bit more detail or specific imagery might make it even more powerful. The relationship with the children feels central, but also a bit unclear in terms of where things actually stand now as the singer reflects back on past mistakes — though it still works as written, so it’s really up to you.
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Excellent song Monty, I'm sure many people can relate to the message.
Beautifully written, one to be proud of. Thank you for posting.
Thank you so much for your thoughts, Sid. Appreciate your response.
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Excellent song Monty, I'm sure many people can relate to the message.
Beautifully written, one to be proud of. Thank you for posting.
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Friends, I retired from automobile sales after 32 years. I managed a new car dealership and worked 6 days a week which included working many long hours. I was raising a family of 5 children, but on those days I did get off, I was selfish with my time and did the things I wanted to do instead of giving my children the real quality time they deserved. Time is much more valuable than just providing for a child. Now I know, and I live with those regrets.
Your thoughts on this song?
Song Title:
HEAVY CHAINS OF REGRET
Lyrics:
Wish I could go back...
Chasin’ my own road, too fast to turn around,
Left my kids to grow up in that sleepy little town.
Doing my own thing I was barely there to see,
My children's lives, unfoldin’ right in front of me.
Heavy chains of regret, I'll carry all my days,
Too selfish to care, wouldn't change my ways.
Now, I’d give up my world, to be there for their cries,
Hold their hands, wipe the tears, from their eyes.
Wanting my own good times, they felt the pain,
Time carved its scars, I’m the one to blame.
Chose my own darkness, over their morning light,
Now, I wake up crying, in the still of the night.
I only cared about myself, let their days drift by,
Missed them growing up, wish I would have tried.
I’d swap all my tomorrows, to rewind those yesterdays,
This regret’s a blade that cuts me deeper every day.
Heavy chains of regret, I'll carry all my days,
Too selfish to care, wouldn't change my ways.
Now, I’d give up my world, to be there for their cries,
Hold their hands, wipe those tears, from their eyes.
Wish time could turn back, I'd guard their hearts,
Regret’s a lonesome road, it's where losing starts.
I'd give most anything, if the hurt could be undone,
But, now it’s just me, and this shadow... I can’t outrun.
https://youtu.be/9ysnRvSHb2Q?si=CDmrGA8f1YTSvigC