Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: Elvis Nash on May 09, 2026, 07:28:24 am
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Classic Elvis
Don't know where you keep coming up with these
Good job
Same deal , I test the waters with Suno to see if it works . Then it's off to Nashville and track it out and sing it myself . They are always 2 keys above my range . So I drop them 2 keys lower . I just write all the time Tex. You can watch a movie and have 5 hooks time the movies over .
Thanks
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Classic Elvis
Don't know where you keep coming up with these
Good job
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Great lyrics - but they always are. You're getting Suno to do what you want it to do. I think it's probably singing with more range than you actually have in real life, and I'm wanting hear a real band version. But this is you doing what you do so well and I love it. Keep em comin' :)
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I enjoyed listening to this song Elvis. Loved this line "Cold steel soul with a broke-down lullaby". Well done!
thanks
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PTSD ha ha ha , all my songs are that
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Really good PTSD song!
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I enjoyed listening to this song Elvis. Loved this line "Cold steel soul with a broke-down lullaby". Well done!
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Could work to track out and sing , fits that outlaw persona I use . Though I drive a white Malibu lol.
Let's make fun of it , So the Ghosts are dead Elvis ? Yeah pretty much. Did you see them carrying a ball and chain ? Not that I can recall . Don't ever write something upbeat like Tiki drinks on a beach ? I did when I was 12 years old
Was a bikini involved ? Of course . Was it California? Nope its was Kansas by a dough boy pool.
Thanks
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Lyrics are outstanding and evocative. Music adds the necessary drama required for this kind of song. Great write.
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https://suno.com/song/1be76000-f5ab-4a13-95bb-c21311faa6c3
Came through the backdoor smelling like Gasoline
Half of my brothers got framed into memories
Neon and whiskey don’t fix what they did to me
So I just dance with the ghosts that still live in me
Black leather shadow under county lights
Whole lotta wrongs still keeping me alive
They all want songs, they don’t want the real life
Cold steel soul with a broke-down lullaby
Pre-Chorus
Every scar got a name now
I just want through the night somehow
Chorus
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
Boots full of miles and the past right behind me
Whole room lit up but the darkness can find me
Laughing too loud while the bad dreams rewind me
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
Smoke in my lungs and old sins trying to blind me
Sheriff got stories, my old girl denies me
But I’m still standing when the morning light finds me
Verse 2
Dead-end motel with the TV flickering
Bottle half gone and the ceiling still spinning
Whole town praying that I won’t come back
But the highway keeps calling my outlaw ass
Pre-Chorus
Every mile feels colder
Freedom comes tied to suffering
Chorus
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
Boots full of miles and the past right behind me
Whole room lit up but the darkness can find me
Laughing too loud while the bad dreams rewind me
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
Smoke in my lungs and old sins trying to blind me
Sheriff got stories, my old girl denies me
But I’m still standing when the morning light finds me
Bridge
If Heaven’s got a backroad
Maybe they’ll let us slide
’Cause all my dead ghosts
Still riding shotgun tonight
Final Chorus
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
No kind of preacher could ever untie me
Last call ringing but the reaper don’t like me
Too mean to die and too gone to live quietly
Still outlaw breathing with dead ghosts beside me
Boots hit the floor while the whole world’s fighting
Sun coming up and it still won’t find peace