Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: rpirone on May 09, 2026, 07:50:17 am
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Good song Rich
Seems like a lot of us ended up on the wrong side of paradise ;D
I think you need to write that , Wrong side of paradise
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Echoing what others have already said. A classy song which sums up our world today. It's the same both sides of the pond. This is a good listen. I'm enjoying the guitar playing and having a Hammond sound underneath works so well. A great track. :)
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Good song Rich
Seems like a lot of us ended up on the wrong side of paradise ;D
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Good song, Rich. Love the production, as well.
Just a great listen, man.
One to be proud of!
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Well you put lots of great furniture in this song! I think you could pick up the pace on the melody a little bit just to make it more singable.
I think you might consider keeping the chorus the same throughout, but that's a personal choice.
Thanks for sharing!
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Wrote this about these days we're living in: https://soundclick.com/song/14897073
Lost Side of Paradise
Drivin’ home from work
Watchin’ twilight fade to black
The end of one more day
I know I’ll never get back
Gonna meet the boys
Down at Danny’s Iron Grid
Where we’ll b*tch ‘bout the job
Just the way my old man did
Chorus:
Great hook man , Yeah it's pretty ruff out there now . Who knows whats going on .
Sounds good man
This country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Storefronts boarded up
Lookin’ close to a ghost town
While the county courthouse
Flies Old Glory upside down
Chorus:
Folks try’n to make it in these times so lean
Prayin’ hard not to lose all their ways and means
Watchin’ their dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Bridge:
My collar’s blue
And my blood is red
I raise a shot glass full of hope
To better days ahead
Chorus:
Cos this country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
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Wrote this about these days we're living in: https://soundclick.com/song/14897073
Lost Side of Paradise
Drivin’ home from work
Watchin’ twilight fade to black
The end of one more day
I know I’ll never get back
Gonna meet the boys
Down at Danny’s Iron Grid
Where we’ll b*tch ‘bout the job
Just the way my old man did
Chorus:
This country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Storefronts boarded up
Lookin’ close to a ghost town
While the county courthouse
Flies Old Glory upside down
Chorus:
Folks try’n to make it in these times so lean
Prayin’ hard not to lose all their ways and means
Watchin’ their dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Bridge:
My collar’s blue
And my blood is red
I raise a shot glass full of hope
To better days ahead
Chorus:
Cos this country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise