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The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: IronKnee on May 09, 2026, 10:09:07 pm

Title: Re: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: IronKnee on May 10, 2026, 06:35:19 pm

Quote from: ChrisPrice on May 10, 2026, 05:37:13 am

Great use of the technology to work up this song Tom. Still very much you. Your voice is really strong here and I like the lyrics. I enjoyed this one. :)

Thanks, Chris... It has to adhere to the original... at least in lyric, melody, and spirit.

Quote from: pistol on May 10, 2026, 05:48:14 am

This one really works for me musically. The raspy vocal delivery, rhythmic vibe, and acoustic guitar fit the lyric perfectly and give it a genuine folk-rock feel. The dummy/tool metaphor stays consistent throughout, and the chorus lands well because it feels more like a declaration than just repetition. Really strong atmosphere on this one.  Enjoyed listening.

Thanks, Pistol... I really appreciate it!

Quote from: Tex on May 09, 2026, 11:15:18 pm

Sounds good Tom

Thanks!

And thanks for all that listened.

Title: Re: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: Elvis Nash on May 10, 2026, 06:30:37 am

Quote from: IronKnee on May 09, 2026, 10:09:07 pm

Hi everyone, I hope you all like this. Tell me what you think.

          “Won’t Be Your Tool”                                   
Words & Music by Tom Tognaci / AI produced Cover

https://soundclick.com/song/13592465

I
I used to be your tool
Your puppet on a string 
Like a dummy on a stool 
You’d say it all without me saying a thing

It’s the same old worn out act 
With the same old one punch line 

I'd like to let a few people go , but moneys involved so I can't

I can relate with this

sounds great
And when you say, you’ve got my back 
Well, that’s the joke ’cause the dummy has no spine

But this time, I play the straight man to the joke

I won’t be your….
I won’t be your fool any more
I won’t be your….
I won’t be your tool any more


II
You use me like a tool 
A prop up on your stage
Just a wide eyed, smiling fool
And when the curtains close, I’m all alone backstage

But this time, I’ll be the first one out the door

I won’t be your….
I won’t be your fool any more
I won’t be your….
I won’t be your tool any more

I used to be your tool
Your brand new shiny thing

Title: Re: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: pistol on May 10, 2026, 05:48:14 am

This one really works for me musically. The raspy vocal delivery, rhythmic vibe, and acoustic guitar fit the lyric perfectly and give it a genuine folk-rock feel. The dummy/tool metaphor stays consistent throughout, and the chorus lands well because it feels more like a declaration than just repetition. Really strong atmosphere on this one.  Enjoyed listening.

Title: Re: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: ChrisPrice on May 10, 2026, 05:37:13 am

Great use of the technology to work up this song Tom. Still very much you. Your voice is really strong here and I like the lyrics. I enjoyed this one. :)

Title: Re: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: Tex on May 09, 2026, 11:15:18 pm

Sounds good Tom

Title: Won’t Be Your Tool
Post by: IronKnee on May 09, 2026, 10:09:07 pm

Hi everyone, I hope you all like this. Tell me what you think.

           “Won’t Be Your Tool”                                   
Words & Music by Tom Tognaci / AI produced Cover

https://soundclick.com/song/13592465

I
I used to be your tool
Your puppet on a string   
Like a dummy on a stool   
You’d say it all without me saying a thing

It’s the same old worn out act   
With the same old one punch line   
And when you say, you’ve got my back 
Well, that’s the joke ’cause the dummy has no spine

But this time, I play the straight man to the joke

I won’t be your….
I won’t be your fool any more
I won’t be your….
I won’t be your tool any more


II
You use me like a tool 
A prop up on your stage
Just a wide eyed, smiling fool
And when the curtains close, I’m all alone backstage

But this time, I’ll be the first one out the door

I won’t be your….
I won’t be your fool any more
I won’t be your….
I won’t be your tool any more

I used to be your tool
Your brand new shiny thing