Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: Tex on May 11, 2026, 09:10:14 pm
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Oh I like that , if ya got a great hook , it writes itself at 2am. One thing I can't stand is a boring hook. Ya know but they prove them boring hooks real well sometimes .
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Emotionally strong. The instrumentation is really good. A perfect fit for the lyrics. I like the repetition of the hook in the chorus. That makes is very catchy. I love the two bridge lines. Very well-written. Great job. Great piece of songwriting..
Thanks Rob,
A bit back I made a comment on a song and I said something about wrong side of paradise, Elvis jumped in there and said you need to write that and this is what I come up with.
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Emotionally strong. The instrumentation is really good. A perfect fit for the lyrics. I like the repetition of the hook in the chorus. That makes is very catchy. I love the two bridge lines. Very well-written. Great job. Great piece of songwriting..
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Yeah thats outlaw
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Thanks Elvis
I prompted Suno to make it an Emotional Modern Country Ballad...
But I think it sounds a bit more like your Outlaw Country...
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ha ha ha , Ahh you wrote it , Very good man . right down the alley man . thats some good stuff
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OK Elvis, per your suggestion I write Wrong Side Of Paradise here you go this is what I've got so far.
Now you tell me what is working or isn't working... What to keep and what not to keep...
I feel like it could be under 4 minutes...
https://suno.com/s/xkLQZubkfnVEIJB7
Wrong Side Of Paradise
There's a neon cross bleedin' of highway Forty-Nine
Your goodbye still burns like whiskey in my throat
Your name still cuts through this heart of mine
And a broken rearview mirror full of better times
Now every mile I drive
Feels like losin' you all over again
I'm on the wrong side of paradise
Sittin' here with these tail lights and lonely nights
A little too much Jack, a little too much pride
Tryin' to outrun your memory, nowhere left to hide
You were my blue-eyed heaven, my one true desire
Now I'm just a lost soul burnin' through hellfire
Yeah, lovin' you cut me down to size
Now I'm livin' on the wrong side of paradise
The boys down at Franky's bar say I oughta let you go
But they ain't watched your shadow dance in candlelight
Now every jukebox heartbreak sounds a little too true
And every whiskey buzz just pulls me back to you
And every barstool prayer
Ends wishin' you were here
I'm on the wrong side of paradise
Sittin' here with these tail lights and lonely nights
A little too much Jack, a little too much pride
Tryin' to outrun your memory, nowhere left to hide
You were my blue-eyed heaven, my one true desire
Now I'm just a lost soul burnin' through hellfire
Yeah, lovin' you cut me down to size
Now I'm livin' on the wrong side of paradise
If heaven's just a place where your kiss still lives
Then hell is every mornin' wakin' up like this
Still on the wrong side of paradise
Prayin' someday I'll catch your lights through the rain
'Cause every road I take runs straight through our past
To the girl that left this country boy half alive
You were my hallelujah in the midnight sky
Now I'm stranded where the angels don't fly
Girl, without you even heaven don't feel right
I'm still livin' on the wrong side of paradise