Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => Ideas/Quotes that want to be songs. => Topic started by: John Voorpostel on June 01, 2026, 08:43:56 am
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ok.............. so... One Woman at a time............. interesting hook.
Perhaps a better hook would be one heartache at a time? or one lesson at a time? MmmM not sure.
I personally don't think you need all those names in there because it sounds like you're repeating yourself just for the fun of it.
2 or 3 women is plenty I would think , otherwise you just sound like a player and no woman is ever good enough for you because they're always trying to "fix' you.
does that make sense?
In country music, if you want people to sing along, it has to be something that the guy wants to sing and the girls agree with. So, in that case, you do have that going for you!!! LOL
Wish I could be more help. but certainly needs a chantable chorus that everyone can sing along to! (all my ex's live in texas).. sort of vibe?
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So there have been some relationship songs posted...from Rob's nice ode to his relationship...Dom eolsewhere...and Elvis is always talking about his 40th marriage (heads up hyperbole)
Here is one I wrote way way back that needs some input that could take it to a better place
babe I think I’m leaving
its time for moving on
all those things I used to do
you pointed out were wrong
I’m off to make myself better
to make another teacher mine
looking forward to improve myself
one woman at a time
my first mate’s name was betty anne
I used to drink and catch a buzz
then laura lee would smile sweetly
when she showed me where the laundry goes
after that I married daisy mae
had me sign a legal pre nup
that I wouldn’t do my business
'n leave the toilet seat standing up
babe I think I’m leaving
its time for moving on
all those things I used to do
you pointed out were wrong
I’m off to make myself better
to make another teacher mine
looking forward to improve myself
one woman at a time
one day I met a sweet young innocent
who didn’t like my hunting ways
after which I set my sights on rachel
she said smoking never pays
then there was my marylou
she made me fit to be tied
told me I couldn’t ever have her loving
until she was satisfied
so now I’m close to perfect
cause I’ve had a dozen or more
women who are eager to help me
change or help me out the door
babe I think I’m leaving
its time for moving on
all those things I used to do
you pointed out were wrong
I’m off to make myself better
to make another teacher mine
looking forward to improve myself
one woman at a time