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The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: redwriter1 on July 29, 2026, 06:17:10 pm

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: redwriter1 on August 04, 2026, 04:44:37 pm

Wow, I didn't even look!! How kewl is that buddy??????

I would twirk if I knew how.. hahhaha

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: Spymonsayz on August 04, 2026, 09:48:04 am

Now number 3!!!  :)

You probably know my opinion by now!

Robert

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: billdraper on August 03, 2026, 02:35:11 pm

There is a song w the line “mama told me there’d be days like these”

That is a clean universal message.

You have captured it here?

Yes, imo.

Yeah! ;D

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: redwriter1 on August 03, 2026, 09:42:13 am

https://www.soundclick.com/country/country-pop?view=charts

#5 after 1 day on Soundclick...........I'll take it!

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: redwriter1 on July 30, 2026, 06:55:53 pm

Quote from: billdraper on July 30, 2026, 06:44:39 pm

Mother told me there’d be, days like these…ha!
I like the decisiveness, and up beat pace, and alliteration.
Modified final chorus is great and like the bridge and basic structure. No wasted words, to the point, universal theme, and looking beyond to tommorrow.
Encore!

Wow Bill.. I know you are good reviewer but I'm extremely happy you outlined all the hard work we put into this song. Literally 48 versions, moving words around, moving verses around.. my co-writer gets credit for the last chorus... and it was great.  Thanks for paying such close attention!! You such a great person on this forum!

Title: Re: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: billdraper on July 30, 2026, 06:44:39 pm

Mother told me there’d be, days like these…ha!
I like the decisiveness, and up beat pace, and alliteration.
Modified final chorus is great and like the bridge and basic structure. No wasted words, to the point, universal theme, and looking beyond to tommorrow.
Encore!

Title: DONE WITH THIS DAY (co-write)
Post by: redwriter1 on July 29, 2026, 06:17:10 pm

Comments welcome!!!!


https://suno.com/s/xRUHw5z6gjsNklhG

Verse 1
I’ve about had it up to here
I look in the rear view mirror
How many hours does it take
For me to get 1… thing…. Done
At the end of the day
I don’t always have to get my way…
But.....

Daaaaamn.


[chorus]
I’m soooooo done with this day,
I’m done done done
make nooooo mistake and
Can’t run run run
 Gonna start up again
 It’s not fun fun fun
I’m so done with this  day

Verse 2
Exhausted
from inter actions
Frusterated
getting off track and
A little give and take would go along way..
turn the world off, just give me a break
Cus......

Daaaaamn.

[chorus]
I’m soooooo done with this day,
I’m done done done
make noooo mistake and
Can’t run run run
 Gonna start up again
 It’s not fun fun fun
I’m so done with this  day

[bridge]
For the most part I've been blessed,
but some days are not like the rest.
 I need to remember, it's gonna get better
but now, let's just say.. I'm done with THIS day.

[chorus]
I’m soooooo done with this day,
I’m done done done
When tomorrow comes my way
gonna run run run
Gonna try it again
Start with fun fun fun
But I’m so done with this day