Starfish Songwriters

The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: Shelleyanne on March 31, 2026, 12:51:03 am

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: redwriter1 on April 01, 2026, 02:53:57 pm

Girl it's your song, go for it!

I sorta liked the male voice, but that's just me.

I would still consider doing some edits of the words, because there's words repeated alot.

Maybe you can ask Suno/chatgpt for a Karen Carpenter type voice.

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: Shelleyanne on April 01, 2026, 02:46:51 pm

I like the country vibe.  I played a little more, trying to get it more to how it sounds in my head.  This isn’t quite there but closer. Lmk!

https://suno.com/s/7j8zIDOBi0kkMHX4

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: redwriter1 on April 01, 2026, 02:00:27 pm

Ok, I took out a couple of lines.

What do you think?

https://suno.com/s/iWkHsd72OgUYfrTB

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: Shelleyanne on April 01, 2026, 11:15:07 am

Yeah it didn’t turn out like I hoped, but I’m still learning Suno.  Can’t seem to tweak it.  You’re welcome to play if you’d like!

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: redwriter1 on March 31, 2026, 10:30:37 am

I like the music, sounds like a soundtrack for a movie.  I would experiment with Suno a little more so the music and singer don't sound so..... mmmm... resigned and hurt.

If you want me to play with it a bit, happy to do that, but if you're happy with it, write on!

Very nicely formatted, easy to follow again, and truly heartbreaking.

Title: Re: I Know What’s True
Post by: Tex on March 31, 2026, 01:38:13 am

Nice to see you getting started...  Nice lyrics... 

The song sounds good...  might not be my choice for the music but all that matters is if you're happy with it.

Good Luck
Tex

Title: I Know What’s True
Post by: Shelleyanne on March 31, 2026, 12:51:03 am

https://suno.com/s/jrVqzCCWD4ouNJcZ

Evening all, I wrote these lyrics a few months ago, and am just learning to play with Suno.  I’m not 100% on the results I got, but since it’s the lyrics I want to showcase…. Well, let me know what you think.  Here are the lyrics for your review as well:

I Know What’s True

It’s okay
I just thought I heard you
Maybe call my name
But I can see that you have plans
And I don’t mean to just step in
So it’s okay
I’ll step back and fade away again

I know what’s true
I hear what I want to hear
And mostly, I hear you
Telling me you want me there
Your hands tucked tightly in my hair
Your mouth on mine
My heartbeat, black and blue
I hear what I want hear
I only hear what I want to hear
With you

Don’t be sad
I just thought I saw you
Reaching for my hand
But you’ve been very clear and
You know, I understand
So don’t be sad
I’ll fade away just like we never planned

I know what’s true
I see what I want to see
And mostly, I see you
Smiling down into my face
Leaning into my embrace
Your eyes so wide
My heartbeat, black and blue
I see what I want to see
I only see what I want to see
With you

It’s all right
I just know I want to be
With you tonight
But my timing is all wrong
And I can’t ever get it right
But it’s all right
I’ll fade away just like the evening light

I know what’s true
I know what I want to know
I just don’t know you
Don’t know the slide of your sweet skin
Where do you start
And I begin
My poor heartbeat, so black and blue
I know what I want to know
I only know what I want to know
With you