Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: redwriter1 on April 01, 2026, 02:08:08 pm
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Great job both you guys!!
Can't wait for the next challenge. :) ;D
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Ok full blown tie between Tex and Rob, you will both be awarded your Trophy badge.!!!
Well done
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Ok then here's mine. By the way Rob I gave yours a like. :)
https://suno.com/s/hrx9HN3taalM7QoY
Your Last Goodbye
I saw your name light up my phone
Couldn't remember the last time you called
Figured I'd call you back someday
Like I've said before, just not today
Got caught up in a different life
Someone else's arms and different nights
Never thought time could slip away so fast
Didn't know that call would be your last
Now your voice lives on forever in my phone
A ghost in my pocket, never leaving me alone
I missed your last goodbye
Let it ring while you were slipping away
Now I play it on repeat and cry
Hearing you fade, hearing you sigh
You said "I don't have long left now."
God, I wish I'd have listened then, somehow
But silence was my only reply
To your last goodbye
Heard the news from a friend the next day
Said you didn't make it through the pain
Said you asked about me near the end
Called my name like we were back then
I sat there starin' at that screen
At that little red dot I hadn't seen
Hands were shackin' when I pressed replay
I heard every word I didn't say
Every word you said cut me deep
With a life time of regret I'll keep
I missed your Last goodbye
Let it ring while you were slipping away
Now I play it on repeat and cry
Hearing you breaking as you try
You said "Call me back if you get this soon..."
Wish I'd have listened that afternoon
I wasn't there by your side
For your last goodbye
Now I talk to a voice that can't respond
To a love that's already gone
The cruelest part I can't deny
You still sound alive
I missed your last goodbye
Let it ring, let you fade away
Now your voice is where I hide
From the guilt lying deep inside
You said "I love you" soft and slow
Words I never got to know
Till it was to late to try
After your last goodbye
Every night I press replay
Just to hear you slip away
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Well........... we might as well. Does everyone agree?
Oh, it looks like this challenge turned into a competition 😅
Maybe I should’ve given my first verse and chorus a little more thought.
I’ve never really liked writing songs in pieces—I’d rather get the whole thing down and then go back and polish it.
Anyway, here’s “Still On My Phone.”
I asked Suno to get Taylor Swift to write the music and record it, lol. I kind of like this one.
STILL ON MY PHONE
https://soundclick.com/song/15227290
[Intro]
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
[Verse]
I found it on an old phone in a kitchen drawer
Dust on the screen, hadn’t charged it in years before
Said “one unheard message” from a Friday night
Back when I was too busy chasin’ neon lights
Hit play and your voice filled up the room
Like you never left, like it wasn’t too soon
[Pre-chorus]
You said “Hey, just call me when you get the time…”
Man, I’d give anything just to rewind
[Chorus]
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
Every word’s a light I keep
Yeah, I lost you in my sleep
But I found you in that beep
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
[Verse]
You say you’re fine but It was buried deep where I never look
Just another number that I never took
Dated back to that night I went out instead
While your name lit up and I let it dead
Now I hear every word I missed back then
Like a door you knocked on, I won’t hear again
[Pre-chorus]
You said “Hey, just call me when you get the time…”
Man, I’d give anything just to rewind
[Chorus]
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
Every word’s a light I keep
Yeah, I lost you in my sleep
But I found you in that beep
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
[Bridge]
If I’d known that night was the last hello
I would’ve let the whole world go
But you’re frozen there in a moment I missed
Sayin’ everything I still replay like this
[Final chorus]
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
Every word’s a light I keep
Yeah, I lost you in my sleep
Now I found you in that beep
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
[Outro]
“Hey, just call me when you get the time…”
Yeah… I’d give anything just to rewind
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Well........... we might as well. Does everyone agree?
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Add your next verse to keep the challenge going?
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Looks like Rob and Tex are tied with two likes.
I'll keep the thread open through today to get some more votes.!!
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It was a long time ago
We were drunk
And she was an angel
Gave her my number
Yeah I Left on the table
Snuck out early
Yeah I knew this was the one
I Never got the call
So I figured we were done
Till last night I found your Message on my phone
Sitting in the dark all alone
Chorus:
Hello this is Jessica
Or you can call me Jessie
I got your note
You really put me in the mood
Did I mention…I'm a dude
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Make sure to hit like on the entries you like.
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Not sure I did this properly, but just for fun here is my attempt:
[Sound FX: Voice-Mail Beep]
[Verse 1] [Female vocals]
Hey, just heard your message
A week late! … hate to say
Woulda accepted in a heartbeat
Hope ya had a good time, anyway
[Pre-Chorus] [Female vocals]
Ugh! My bad… my loss, I know it
Dumb phone - such a ****!
Bet you thought I was curvin' you
Worst time for it to glitch
[Chorus 1] [Female vocals]
Missed messages, dropped signals
Had no clue that you cared
Still can’t believe you called me
Off-guard … and a little scared
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love the line "ghost in my pocket"
Won't give any feedback cus this is a challenge. Thanks for putting in your entry!
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Your Last Goodbye
Verse
I saw your name light up my phone
Couldn't remember when you called last
Figured I'd call you back someday
Like I've said before, just not today
Got caught up in a different life
Someone else's arms and different nights
Never thought time could slip away so fast
Didn't know that call would be your last
Pre Chorus
Now your voice lives forever in my phone
A ghost in my pocket, never leaving me alone
Chorus
I missed you last goodbye
Let it ring while you were slipping away
Now I play it on repeat and cry
Hearing you fade, hearing you sigh
You said "I don't have long left now"
God, I wish I'd have listened then, somehow
But silence was my only reply
To your last goodbye
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Here's my quick..................
I’m sorry honey, I’m running late
But I can’t wait to see you tonight
I’ve had a lot of things on my plate
But I’m gonna make things right
Her heart skipped a beat
at the sound of his voice
3 times she hit repeat
Looks like he’d made his choice
Chorus:
She knew all along he would come around
In the back of the closet pulls out her old gown
High heels and stockings the whole nine yards
It’s time they make a brand new start
(spoiler alert, he was calling his girlfriend not his wife_)
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Ok, I'll give it a try. This is quick and dirty. Feel free to modify or expand this...
Verse
I found it on an old phone in a kitchen drawer
Dust on the screen, hadn’t charged it in years before
Said “one unheard message” from a Friday night
Back when I was too busy chasin’ neon lights
Hit play and your voice filled up the room
Like you never left, like it wasn’t too soon
You said “Hey, just call me when you get the time…”
Man, I’d give anything just to rewind
Chorus
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
Every word’s a light I keep
Yeah, I lost you in my sleep
But I found you in that beep
Still on my phone… you’re not gone
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In addition, you can "like" multiple entries, but whoever ends up with the most wins.
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Ok Tex, you're probably right.
Let's just do lyrics to start.
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Post the challenge in the lyrics section if we're just doing a lyric challenge.
But it's totally up to you. We can make it a suno challenge later. :)
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Yes, you can post your verse and chorus here.
Pretty much lyrics, but if you wanna spin it through Suno if you like, that's fine too.
I can't wait to figure out even what I'm gonna come up with! lol
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Post it here?
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I love the idea of a Challenge topic! If I have time, I would like to participate. (Working on another new song currently, but I hope to finish that by tomorrow.. Always have one or more in process- yikes). I hope a few people will be doing this one - thanks for proposing it.
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### 🎼 Genre:
Country Rock / Heartland Ballad
### 🎬 Situation:
You find a voicemail you never listened to until it was too late.
### 💔 Emotion:
Regret mixed with gratitude
📌 Write:
1 verse + 1 chorus
Deadline will be 4/4/2026 and whoever gets the most LIKES gets bragging rights!
(disclosure: stole this from a facebook challenge)