Starfish Songwriters

The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: Shelleyanne on April 15, 2026, 12:52:51 am

Title: Re: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: sid shovel on May 05, 2026, 06:26:02 pm

I'm with Chris on this one, whichever way you go with the structure it's still gonna come out an excellent song that ticks all the boxes. Loved it, well done.
Sid

Title: Re: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: ChrisPrice on May 05, 2026, 03:59:53 pm

This is a good listen. I read Tex's suggestions - I'd be interested to hear it that way, but I'm liking this a lot as it is. The right lyrics for this genre.  :)

Title: Re: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: Elvis Nash on April 29, 2026, 06:16:12 am

its a little hard to grasp but I got the story , Tex has some good ideas

Title: Re: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: Shelleyanne on April 16, 2026, 05:25:44 pm

Thanks Tex, always appreciate feedback!  I’ll play with it a bit, see what works  :)

Title: Re: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: Tex on April 15, 2026, 02:39:51 pm

Hello Shelly,

I had to listen to this twice, the first time I wasn't catching it.

Just a suggestion.... how about you having 6 line verses and two line pre-chorus's

I don't want to hear it
Don't talk to me like that

Should be your pre-chorus's

A 6 line verse
pre-chorus
chorus
6 line verse
pre-chorus
chorus
bridge
chorus
outro

Just my thinking, but it's fine like it is.
Best to you
Tex

Title: Don’t Talk to Me Like That
Post by: Shelleyanne on April 15, 2026, 12:52:51 am

https://suno.com/s/4B59WyvGKgYDMj45


If you say you miss me
I might take your hand
If you say you’re sorry
I’ll say I understand

If you say there’s no one else like me
I’ll take you back
I don’t want to hear it
Don’t talk to me like that

Chorus
Tell me I misunderstood
Lay down all your charm
Tell me you still love me
And I’ll fall into your arms

Tell me no one knows you like I do
I’ll take you back
I can’t stand to hear it
Don’t talk to me like that

Bridge
When I close my eyes I hear your voice
You’re sorry but you had to make a choice
You’ve said your piece, I know what I heard
Not another smile, not another word

Chorus
Tell me I misunderstood
Lay down all your charm
Tell me you still love me
I might fall into your arms

Tell me no one loves you like I do
I’ll take you back
Please don’t let me hear it
You can’t talk to me like that

It’s too late to change your mind
It’s too late to walk it back
I don’t want to hear it
You can’t talk to me like that