Starfish Songwriters

The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: Rob B. on April 19, 2026, 09:29:39 pm

Title: Re: A Fly That Won't Die
Post by: redwriter1 on April 22, 2026, 10:47:40 am

I love the groove and melody and some really catchy fun lyrics.  Not all songs have to be serious life changing prose.

I like it.!!!

Title: Re: A Fly That Won't Die
Post by: Rob B. on April 21, 2026, 10:36:00 pm

Thanks, appreciate it! Every site’s got its flies… just hoping I haven’t been one too often myself 🤣.

Title: Re: A Fly That Won't Die
Post by: Elvis Nash on April 20, 2026, 03:37:20 pm

Well that happens , lol

Title: Re: A Fly That Won't Die
Post by: Tex on April 19, 2026, 10:09:00 pm

I smile every time I listen to this one.

Catchy and Funny.

Nice job. 

Title: A Fly That Won't Die
Post by: Rob B. on April 19, 2026, 09:29:39 pm

Just wrote a new track with a sarcastic edge. It’s catchy, a little ruthless, and written about someone who doesn't hang out here. The lyrics are surely not the best I've ever written but, wow, I really love what Suno did with this one. I used the following prompts: catchy, R&B, soul, blues, male vocals, vocal harmonies, laid-back groove, Rhodes piano, acoustic guitar, electric guitar, drums, light funky bass, string ensemble, studio production, sarcastic. I would love to hear your thoughts.
 
A Fly That Won’t Die
https://soundclick.com/song/15230650
 
[hyper-modern production with clear vocals, no autotune, Dolby Atmos mix, high-fidelity, high-definition audio and wide stereo]
 
[Intro]
 
[Verse]
You walk in like you own the place
Big talk, but it’s all misplaced
Typing fast but it makes no sense
Every line just a weak defense
 
You brag loud like you **** the code
But you're stuck on the same old road
Spellcheck crying, waving a flag
Still you flex like you never lag
 
[Pre-Chorus]
All that noise, but you say nothing
Hit “send” and it’s just bluffing
 
[Chorus]
You're a fly that won't die
Buzzin' loud but you still can't fly
You still can't spell, even with AI
Talk so big but it's all a lie
 
You're a fly that won't die
Round and round, just wasting time
You still can't spell, even with AI
Yeah, you try, but you can't get by
 
[Break]
 
[Verse]
Autocorrect tried to save your case
But it gave up without a trace
Every post is a comedy show
Did you mean that? We'll never know
 
Caps lock on like you're in a fight
But your words don’t land right
You swing hard but you miss the mark
All that spark, but it’s just dark
 
[Pre-Chorus]
All that noise, yeah it’s so empty
Loud and wrong on every entry
 
[Chorus]
You're a fly that won't die
Buzzin' loud but you still can't fly
You still can't spell, even with AI
Talk so big but it's all a lie
 
You're a fly that won't die
Round and round, just wasting time
You still can't spell, even with AI
Yeah, you try, but you can't get by
 
[Bridge]
Round and round, same mistake
Every word you overtake
Mirror’s ****, but you still pose
Everyone sees, but nobody knows
 
[Breakdown]
Buzz, buzz—hear that sound?
Going nowhere, circling round
Buzz, buzz—say it twice
Still don’t make it sound that nice
 
[Final Chorus]
You're a fly that won't die
Buzzin' loud but you still can't fly
You still can't spell, even with AI
Talk so big but it's all a lie
 
You're a fly that won't die
Endless loop, no reason why
You still can't spell, even with AI
Fade away, just say goodbye
 
[Outro]
You're a fly that won't die