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The Sandbox => Lyrics for Review/Critique => Topic started by: redwriter1 on May 02, 2026, 06:55:42 pm

Title: Re: If you were going to write about this topic, what would you say?
Post by: redwriter1 on May 06, 2026, 10:02:24 am

Wow, you really dug deep on this one!   I know I posted it a few days ago, so that's a good job.

Myself and another writer were actually working on this song for the past week and it's almost done, but I wanted to get other people's input, so thank you for that!

I'll post our lyric later today and see what you think!

Welcome to the forum!!

Title: Re: If you were going to write about this topic, what would you say?
Post by: pistol on May 05, 2026, 07:02:02 pm

Hi! Well I love a good challenge writing activity and this one pulled me in.  I hope this is the correct place to post it.  :D

This is what I came up with for the concept or idea of America metaphorically as a Woman.  Hope you like it.

I’m a Woman

V1
From conception I’ve labored in fight
My babies born in the dark of night
Always learning from what I’ve done
Sometimes I’ve lost, sometimes I’ve won
But I think I try too hard to be
The mother everyone wants to see
I think the house I’ve built is stressed
My home has always been a test

Ch
Oh I'm a woman
In a time
Where stable ground
Presents a climb
I'm a woman
At this stage
Torn inside
By fear and rage

V2
My body carries a weight beyond
My figure extends across the pond
No matter what you think of me
My hopes will shine, my stars are free
But deep inside my house there's tension
Bringing me to the world's attention
Where I will go and what I do
Will always simmer in my stew


Ch
Oh I'm a woman
In a time
Where stable ground
Presents a climb
I'm a woman
At this stage
Torn inside
By fear and rage

Br
I'm single just like my children
We've spread ourselves too thin
Struggling to keep up with standards that were set
Now the conflict is setting in


Ch
Oh I'm a woman
In a time
Where stable ground
Presents a climb
I'm a woman
At this stage
Torn inside
By fear and rage

© 2026 pistol

Title: If you were going to write about this topic, what would you say?
Post by: redwriter1 on May 02, 2026, 06:55:42 pm

Imagine America is a woman and all she's been through, not denying the past mistakes but saying, it's my job to nurture, protect and defend and I didn't always get it right, but I'm still here.


Any thoughts people??