Starfish Songwriters
The Sandbox => MP3 songs for Review/Critique => Topic started by: sid shovel on May 05, 2026, 06:40:28 pm
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Yeah, I'm kinda of a stickler for the story, since I'm a Nashville writer. But I still wanna know the real story to see if the lyric matches it.
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As Tex points out, it's a simple revenge story, she sets up a naive kid and then she gets her just desserts by being set up herself. In this song, the story takes a back seat to the music and the hook.
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Love the voice and melody that suno came up with (can you share the prompt?)
But as far as the lyric goes, what exactly happened? What is the story?
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Thanks Tex/Chris,
Appreciate you finding the time to comment.
As to the chords, I wouldn't know my Am from my G7, thought it was a finance thing.
The kiddie vocals drive me nuts and it's only recently I've found a way to get around it.
The melody and rhythm seemed to go down a well worn country track so I opted for those.
Sid
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I like this Sid. It's built around a well used chord sequence..not a crit - most of my songs are too!! You say it's back catalog..I don't remember hearing this one before. The vocal is very AI - but I'm thinking that might be intentional here. A damn good song. :)
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Revenge can be a **** for one side but a pleasure for another side.
Not bad at all, Sid
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One from the back catalogue
words mine/rest Ai
https://soundclick.com/song/15240880 (https://soundclick.com/song/15240880)
[intro]
[verse 1]
Well you might be rich and a stuck up ****
But you should'na done what you did
The things you said, you should'a kept to yourself
She was only sixteen and still just a kid
[chorus]
It does feel good, an' I knew that it would
I've waited a while, for you to get your dues
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you
[verse 2]
You pulled one of your tricks just to get those pic's
That guy would do whatever you said
She didn't know she was in a video
With the crush who had her in his bed
[chorus]
It does feel good, an' I knew that it would
I've waited a while, for you to get your dues
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you
[verse 3]
Your boyfriend Zac, was the star quarterback
You were blind to the passes under the bleachers
Till I sent the head some 6 by 4's in colour
of Zac scoring a touchdown, with one of the teachers
[chorus]
It does feel good, an' I knew that it would
I've waited a while, for you to get your dues
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you
[bridge]
You got what you deserved,
and I really hope it hurt.
For all the pain you caused,
I'm glad that I was there
[chorus]
It does feel good, an' I knew that it would
I've waited a while, for you to get your dues
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you
[outro]
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you
Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there
When you get what's comin' to you