Starfish Songwriters

The Sandbox => Lyrics for Review/Critique => Topic started by: rpirone on May 06, 2026, 06:44:05 pm

Title: Re: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: Elvis Nash on May 09, 2026, 09:45:56 am

Pretty long bridge , I would consider keeping half of it .
Another than that looks good man

Title: Re: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: rpirone on May 07, 2026, 09:32:08 am

Tex

Appreciate you looking this over and the well wishes. Thx

Title: Re: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: rpirone on May 07, 2026, 09:30:36 am

Whengen

Thanks for checking this out.  I know what you mean about that one line. I'm sure I'll be rewriting it so it flows better.

Title: Re: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: Tex on May 06, 2026, 07:16:18 pm

Nice job here Rich,

I don't see any reason why this wouldn't work.

Good Luck with it.
Tex

Title: Re: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: guest44 on May 06, 2026, 07:05:12 pm

These are good lyrics.
This seems to trip a bit for me, but that's just me - What the world holds outside this one stop light town
other than that, it's well constructed and paints a picture.

Title: When The Mem'ries Were Good
Post by: rpirone on May 06, 2026, 06:44:05 pm

This lyric was inspired by the small town in the movie "Doc Hollywood"

When The Mem’ries Were Good

I recall all those dog days of summer
August wind like hot breath on my neck
I’d rub my brow with a cool sweet tea glass
Watchin’ kids chase fireflies on the sun-baked grass

From the back porch you’d hear the 9:15
And watch the trail of her smokestack cloud   
Nights I dreamt of jumpin’ that train to see
What the world holds outside this one stop light town

Chorus:
Our younger days seem to fade so fast
Maybe what keeps us young is getting lost in the past
Like that summer in my neck of the woods
Back when all the mem’ries were good

I’d walk down to the creek through the town square
Honeysuckle heavy in the air
I’d lay back in the tall grass in the sun
Watchin’ clouds roll by and that old river run

Saturday nights down at the picture show
Neckin’ in the dark in the last row
Later we’d head over to the ice cream parlor
A sugar cone and two scoops for a dollar

Chorus

Bridge:
I’d go swimmin’ with my girl out by the falls
In a field of magnolias where the catbirds call
We’d make love where no one could find us
Leavin’ the world we knew far behind us

Main Street was lined and dressed for Labor Day
Town’s old soldiers marched in the parade
School kids did “Our Town” at the church hall
That last gasp of summer before leaves start to fall

Chorus