followed your advice Robert, and I'm very pleased with the outcome.
Here's the link to the modified version for anyone interested
https://soundclick.com/song/15248998

and the modified lyrics to comply with Robert's suggestions:

[intro]

[verse 1]
I need to hold you,
feel your arms around me.
The warmth of your breath,
flowin’ soft across my neck.

[verse 2]
So many nights I’ve dreamt of this,
you pull me in so close.
Close my eyes an’ taste your kiss,
standin’ on my toes.

[pre-chorus]
Hold me here, don’t break the spell,
just keep me close to you.

[chorus]
hold you,
just let me hold you.
Can’t live without you,
never let me go.

[verse 3]
Like a scene from an old movie,
I’ve seen it all in mind.
I give myself to you completely,
a feelin’ so divine.

[bridge]
Is this what love’s about,
losin’ all control?
Nothin’ matters but that moment,
surrenderin’ body and soul.

[long musical interlude]

[pre-chorus]
Hold me here, don’t break the spell,
just keep me close to you.

[chorus]
hold you,
just let me hold you.
Can’t live without you,
never let me go.

[outro]
hold you,
just let me hold you.
All I ever wanted was you,
never let me go.

[fade to end]

My thanks once again Robert, I've learnt some things today.

Sid

Classic Tex, an outstanding piece of work to be proud of.
By the second verse I had tears in my eyes.
Played it for my wife and she ran out of the room halfway through.
Take a bow, she never does that for mine!
Outstanding writing Tex, if you never write another.............
Hope someone picks this up, it's a hit.
Sid

One from the back catalogue

words mine/rest Ai

https://soundclick.com/song/15240880


[intro]


 [verse 1]

 Well you might be rich and a stuck up ****

 But you should'na done what you did

 The things you said, you should'a kept to yourself

 She was only sixteen and still just a kid


 [chorus]

 It does feel good, an' I knew that it would

 I've waited a while, for you to get your dues

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you


 [verse 2]

 You pulled one of your tricks just to get those pic's

 That guy would do whatever you said

 She didn't know she was in a video

 With the crush who had her in his bed


 [chorus]

 It does feel good, an' I knew that it would

 I've waited a while, for you to get your dues

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you


 [verse 3]

 Your boyfriend Zac, was the star quarterback

 You were blind to the passes under the bleachers

 Till I sent the head some 6 by 4's in colour

 of Zac scoring a touchdown, with one of the teachers


 [chorus]

 It does feel good, an' I knew that it would

 I've waited a while, for you to get your dues

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you


 [bridge]

 You got what you deserved,

 and I really hope it hurt.

 For all the pain you caused,

 I'm glad that I was there


 [chorus]

 It does feel good, an' I knew that it would

 I've waited a while, for you to get your dues

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you


 [outro]

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you

 Oh, I really do care, an' I wanna be there

 When you get what's comin' to you

Easy on the ear, good foot-tapping country fare.
Thanks for sharing the secret to happiness, I'll have some of that!
Lovely song, well done.
Sid

An excellent piece of social commentary written in an easy flowing style.
Lost count of the brilliant phrases used throughout the song, well done.
Enjoyed this very much, you have a talent for this genre.
Sid

Excellent, thanks for your prompt reply, appreciated.

May I ask if there are any prerequisites to posting a song, e.g. 2 comments on others songs before posting one of yours. Only one posting/person/day?
Thanks,
Sid