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NYC Motel 1962
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This is a work-in-progress. I kind of hear it as a Tom Waits or Lou Reed vibe.
Comments are welcome and appreciated.

NYC MOTEL 1962
The desk clerk leans back in his chair
Thumbing the pages of his racing form
He keeps one eye on the TV
And the other eye on the door

A ragged old man’s passed out in the lobby
After an all-night jag of booze and smack
By morning he’ll be on ice down at the morgue
Just one more John Doe in a body bag

The night seems to drag its feet
He checks in some regulars and their tricks
Most of them are out of state business men
Or first-time wide-eyed hicks

Twenty-dollar hookers in ten-dollar rooms
Hourly rates no questions asked
The cops all look the other way
For a kickback and a piece of ass

The walls are yellow from nicotine
The halls reek of desperation and p*ss
She takes his money, turns the key and says
“I won’t backdoor and I don’t kiss”

Through the paper-thin walls
You can hear every thud
From some dragged out sister
Acting like she’s in bed with some stud

And the air is thick with taxi fumes
Seeping into the dingy rooms
Sound of the traffic assaults your ears
While the hot sticky rain pours down like tears

And the alley is a minefield
Of junkies and homeless souls
Just one more little corner of the world
The Lord let get out of control

From the Bowery to Skid Row
There’s just darkness and despair
The circles of Hell are empty
Cos all the devils are here
« Last Edit: April 16, 2026, 07:10:21 pm by rpirone »

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Re: NYC Motel 1962
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Boy does this lyric have a ton of furniture! Well done.!!

I can almost smell the lobby. But is there a story here or just a description of a place (which is fine) but should there be at least one line that repeats?

Otherwise it sounds like the beginning of a very good novel.

Post some more stuff with music, that would be awesome!
When you row someone else across the river, you get there yourself

Re: NYC Motel 1962
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Thanks for the generous comments. I have been writing and rewriting this one for several years. This is the closest I've come to feeling like it might be close to done.  I kind of saw this as cinematic, hence the descriptive scenario. It needs to be formatted properly so there's still work to be done.

Thanks again for taking the time to check this out.