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I started this song yesterday, it's gonna be really hard to finish, but I thought I would see if anyone could relate. Not sure how many females we have around here, but it applies to men to I think.


My Defense
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Verse 1
I don’t know the reason I sleep with my shirt on
I don’t remember why I don’t have a nightgown
I can’t sleep in my bare skin, exposed and naked
Blankets won’t help and I can’t escape it


Verse 2
That feeling of being dirty for no reason
I need protection from something unseen
I don’t know what happened and I’m glad that I don’t
But everything is not as it seems

chorus
I don’t want to know, what I don’t know
What good would it do me now?
My life would not change and thoughts rearranged
Won’t be a guiding light at the end of a chain of events
I don’t wanna know and that’s my defense.
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Re: My Defense
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Kay-lynn,

I sleep in a t-shirt, sweat pants and socks. I've never wondered why. So you want me to be honest here, it might just be that I'm a man but this didn't pull me in what so ever. Sorry but JMO.

But if you think it's worth while go for it.
« Last Edit: April 10, 2026, 04:26:53 pm by Tex »
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Fair enough Tex,... as I said I think it's more a female thing.

Do you care to tell me what you think the song is actually about?  Just curious.
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Well, I kinda think it's about a past event that you've tried to bury. Just still hanging on and you can't let go of it. That shirt may be some type of shield or just a reminder of a past lover you haven't let go of yet.

But you may have something else in mind.

Don't let what I say keep you from going on with it.
I hear a lot of songs on the radio, that I think how did that even get a cut.
« Last Edit: April 10, 2026, 06:17:13 pm by Tex »
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I promise you , it's not about a lover.
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I sleep bare, I hate clothes
But this has nothing to do with this song
If your using defense as a hook , I think You need more examples pointing to it to defend whatever your trying to put across here , my 2 cents
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Pretext, you know you were sexually abused as a child, but by God's good grace, you don't remember the all details, but you remember the feeling. Then your husband wants to know why you won't sleep in the buff, or why you don't wear low cut shirts, well, this is why.

My Defense2
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By showing your scars I would just include you were molested as a child in your song
It would be relatable
As of now it’s really to vague to even know what this songs about
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I see what you're saying, but I think there are some things you shouldn't say outloud in a song that young ears might listen to.
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Why, it's real happens all the time . Kid are drenched in the internet , they've seen everything
Get it out on the open . Deal with the problem , give us a solution in the song
I think thats important , can't be one thing cuz were all different , It would need to be blanket solution in the general area on healing. So the solution comes in the bridge , then here comes that last chorus bit changed up , once you figure out the first one , on a vcvcbc


I think you need a stronger hook.
He didn’t take me I survived him
The pre going in first verse could be
I was taken advantage of as a little girl
But I'm stronger and didn't wreck my world
They'll get the drift on molested now without saying it

All I got right now

One more thing , your saying the same thing in that v1 , I would use one or two and give us more examples whatever that molestation did to you, well maybe you can , but Id more the story along on more things. keep the lights on , things like that

Did you know they have vodka made out of Lake Tahoe water ? I wonder how they swung that ?


You could use child . lose the world girl cliche
« Last Edit: April 13, 2026, 03:58:15 am by Elvis Nash »
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V2 would have to go somewhere else , not a laundry list of sleep with clothes lights on ect
Maybe talk to us , On I know there's people out there like me , relate with their problems on the same situation


All I got
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I'm taking all your thoughts, and seriously still working on it.
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ok gotta cook breakfast , You'll get it
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My Defense2
Listen and make your own on Suno.
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ok your leaving it opened ended what happened to you
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