The Tide

The Tide
Posted by evaveramusica on 29 Mar, 2026 04:08
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Hi dear fellow songwriters! ☺️
A couple of years ago I wrote this song, The Tide. It's 100% human, no AI involved (didn't exist back then). I wrote the lyrics and the melody - originally on the guitar - and then produced it together with a friend, who's a professional producer. All vocals are sung by me. Even though the song is already finalized, I would love to get some honest feedback on it, always eager to learn and improve myself.

The song is about the inevitable ups and the downs in a relationship. The low tide, where everything is easy and calm, and the high tide, where you feel like drowning and you'll never get back to shore again. I hope it can bring someone perspective whenever people feel stuck in those deep, cold waters, because eventually the dark water will disappear.

VERSE 1
Your face is like a book I've read a thousand times
The pages stained the cover broken
But I just love the way your story intertwines
With the words you're reading from my mind

PRE-CHORUS 1
We have nothing left to prove
Yet there is so much we could tear apart
And loose...

CHORUS 1
So come into my arms
I'll hold you tonight
And if you're cold and tired
I'll restart the fire
Dive into my mind
I'll let you decide
What words to write
Let's go against the tide
Tonight...

VERSE 2
And I know all the secret hideouts on your skin
It's a map I've learned and know by heart
And all the rivers, roads, I know where they begin
And where they've let us so far

PRE-CHORUS 2
And we have nothing left to prove
Yet there is so much we could tear apart
And loose...

CHORUS 2
So come into my arms
I'll hold you tonight
And if you're cold and tired
I'll restart the fire
Dive into my mind
I'll let you decide
What words to write
Let's go against the tide

BRIDGE
Tonight we'll be fine
We'll find our way back to the coast in time
So hold on tight
Let's try not to get swallowed by the tide
We'll be fine

CHORUS 3
So come into my arms
I'll hold you tonight
And if you're cold and tired
I'll restart the fire
Dive into my mind
I'll let you decide
What words to write
Let's go against the tide
Tonight...

#1 Reply
Posted by Tex on 29 Mar, 2026 11:18
Eva happy to see you here...

Nice voice...

I like the chorus...

Good job....

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#2 Reply
Posted by Marsha on 29 Mar, 2026 14:33
I like the premise, some of the lines in the verses are great. Not a huge fan of the melody or the vocal, it sounds too much like a mother singing to her child. Maybe a male vocal would be better?

So the basic thought is , it seems like they're broken up and the singer is saying, well let's jump in bed together anyway. If I got that wrong, I'm so sorry.

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#3 Reply
Posted by serenowolf on 30 Mar, 2026 14:39
You have a nice voice...I think if you tightened the phrasing and cut some of the dramatic pausing...for instance "tear apart...and lose" you could just say "tear apart and lose" and go right into the Chorus...that might make the listener feel more movement. It's a little sleepy as is IMO...it's a nice song, but truthfully, I didn't get any of what you explained the song was about...and even with your explanation, I'm not sure exactly what you're trying to say with "go against the tide" ...so if you were to ever rewrite, you might try to say (or show with examples) the explanation but in the song...but as an artistic chill song, it works...nice job overall!

Oh, lastly, lastly...in the spirit of utmost honesty, if my wife told me your first two lines, that I'm a stained old book she's read a thousand times...I would be kind of insulted...I don't think you meant it that way but just being honest of how it reads...