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Words Me; Music Suno
[Verse 1]
There was a time when bells chimed
Finding myself of new mind
This reality is perceived to be
Found in trumpeting sounds
[Verse 2]
My heart beats to stomping feet
Marching in place as my face
Melts away to other days
Never losing sight of right
[Verse 3]
I've lost my ears and cannot hear
What's being said, am I dead
Or alive, this meaning I strive
To understand the shifting sands
[Verse 4]
I am so old, my body's gone cold
Running back from the black
To the wight only seems right
On solid ground I'm crowned
[Outro]
With this wood box I could
Be at peace and finally cease
Living and gradually giving
Ashes and dust to ashes and dust
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Are you sure this is a lyric and not a poem? I'm just asking because songs usually have a chorus (?)
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Thanks for the comment. Not all songs have a chorus or a bridge for that matter. especially in the prog /experimental genres.
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Ok, point taken. Thanks for the info!
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That's why I like it, because you are free to explore more with the words, than being stuck behind the traditional format.
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Words Me; Music Suno
https://suno.com/s/qXSVDtJNbV27zGPb
[Verse 1]
There was a time when bells chimed
Finding myself of new mind
This reality is perceived to be
Found in trumpeting sounds
[Verse 2]
My heart beats to stomping feet
Marching in place as my face
Melts away to other days
Never losing sight of right
[Verse 3]
I've lost my ears and cannot hear
What's being said, am I dead
Or alive, this meaning I strive
To understand the shifting sands
[Verse 4]
I am so old, my body's gone cold
Running back from the black
To the wight only seems right
On solid ground I'm crowned
[Outro]
With this wood box I could
Be at peace and finally cease
Living and gradually giving
Ashes and dust to ashes and dust
Actually that is a structure , Its a A/A/A/A , To The Moon and back by Luke Bryan used that
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HAHAHAHA. Too funny, that wasn't intentional I just started writing until I was done.
Maybe I need to go back and re-read Marty's book, as it seems glossing over it, I missed that
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Who's Marty?
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Marty Dodson
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Well kinda Luke uses hook on bottom of each verse . This is really a poem. Martys big on just making sense in songs and be universal.
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By nashville standards, yes, but again, this more for the experimental genres.
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Thats true . Yours I've lived life , now I've died. He also said there aint no rules , case in point your song.
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Yes, again, going by Nashville standard, Marty also said it's ok to be abstract as long as it makes sense. which is true to a point.
Would I even attempt to try to publish this in Nashville? No, it's not a Nashville type song. But there is a market for it.
I seriously need to change my writing style, I was going to post more songs, but I think i'll hold back for a bit, constantly having this discussion, has gotten old
This is the song by Steve Wilson whose a grammy award winning songwriter / producer, that i based my song on -
[Verse 1]
Hey brother
Happy returns
It's been a while now
I bet you thought that I was dead
But I'm still here
Nothing's changed, nothing's changed
[Verse 2]
Hey brother
I'd love to tell you I've been busy
But that would be a lie
'Cause the truth is
The years just pass like trains
I wave but they don't slow down
Don't slow down
[Verse 3]
Hey brother
I see the freaks and dispossessed on day release
Avoiding the police
I feel I'm falling once again
But now there's no one left to catch me
[Verse 4]
Hey brother
I feel like I'm living in parentheses
And I've got trouble with the bills
Do the kids remember me?
Well, I've got gifts for them
And for you much sorrow
But I'm feeling kind of drowsy now
So I'll finish this tomorrow
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I'd say to market your songs is create Youtube channel with shorts .Pitch game is brutal and you need deep pockets. You'd need 4 jobs a shrink and a life time supply of Jack Daniels . You're going to die from laughing so hard it hurts . Cuz somebody 30 years ago ,told you ,your going to be on radio.
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