Hi:

The chorus initially seems a little long for me?  I might have cut it in half initially - feels natural to have finished on line 8...and then maybe do the very last chorus extended?  Or even the second?


I like the ambiguity of "it".  I may have resolved in the bridge that everybody's got an "it" - they just gotta find it?  That way it may clear the hurdle of the sexual overtones? (While I understand people might think this...is it them projecting?)

Thanks for sharing!

Very Smooth....

I think the cadence of the melody can be a little repetitive, but that is only my opinion. Perhaps even consider 3 lines in verses instead of everything being four?  Rhyming pattern may be AAB - AAB.  This will sometimes introduce space.  Also (and this is often my preference) I like choruses to lift a song up.  The first two lines of your chorus almost feels like a prechorus...I might consider using that chord structure as a prechorus, then go into a full blown chorus where your voce sings on a higher level than the rest of the song, therefor lifting it up?  This is only my opinion and preference though.

Example I might consider is...

prechorus:
She’s ev’ry mem’ry that you’ll ever keep
She’s why the sun rises and sets

Chorus ( now maybe singing in a slightly higher range...rooted in E?)
She is...She’s ev’rything you’ll ever need
She is...(line rhymes with need)
She is...(Line rhymes with need or gets?)
She is...as good as love ever gets

This can cement the chorus so every time you hear it, you know you are there...


Thanks for sharing! 

There is a song w the line “mama told me there’d be days like these”

That is a clean universal message.

You have captured it here?

Yes, imo.

Yeah!

I've noticed that, so far, nobody has commented on this song. The reactions I've received elsewhere have been pretty similar. Most people assume I wrote something "dirty" or overtly sexual, and I suspect that's made some listeners a little hesitant to comment.

That made me realize I should probably explain the idea behind the lyric.

The song never defines what "it" is. That's intentional. The chorus is built around a double entendre, so listeners are free to interpret it however they like. If someone hears a sexual meaning, that's certainly one possible interpretation - but it isn't the only one, and it isn't the one I had in mind when I wrote it.

For example, "it" could simply be love.

• Squeeze it, tease it – Love should have both affection and playfulness.

• Hold it if you need it – Hold on to love when life gets difficult.

• Love it, leave it – Love is a choice. Sometimes you embrace it, and sometimes the healthiest choice is to let it go.

• It will grow if you feed it – Love grows when you nurture it with trust, kindness, time, laughter, and attention.

• Wrap your hands around it – Embrace it. Protect it. Treasure it.

• Feel it come alive – Relationships flourish when both people invest in them.

• Find a little rhythm – Every couple develops their own rhythm and way of moving through life together.

• Let it take you for a ride – Let love carry you through life's adventures.

• Call it what you want to / I won't disagree – Everyone has their own definition of love.

• 'Cause what it really means / Depends on what you see – The meaning belongs to the listener.
 

For me, that's really the point of the song. It isn't about one specific thing. It's about the fact that we all bring our own experiences - and imaginations - to a lyric. So yes... if someone hears a sexual song, that's a perfectly valid interpretation. If someone hears a love song, a song about songwriting, or something completely different, that's equally valid.

Whatever "it" may be. 😊

I like the laid-back vibe and really enjoyed the listen. The vocalist reminds me a bit of Michael Bublé. I personally think the arrangement could be improved by adding a short [break] or instrumental [interlude] to create a little more variation. Other than that, I think it's a great song.

All the best,
Robert